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Color me bloody
Color me red
Color me that color I’ll always dread


Let your words strike me
Let your fists bruise me
Let me fall crumpled in pain

Hurt me till I can’t feel anymore
Hit me till your arms are sore
Lash out at me, and don’t take it back
One day though, I might fight back

Color me bloody

Let me cry
Let me die
Let me boil on the inside
Let my eyes well up
Let the tears burn my face
Let my anger build

Color me red

You’ve watch me fall apart at your hands
Watch me as I fight back
You’ve watched me bleed it all
Watch as I strike back
Watch me as I hold you life in my hands
Watch as I show you what you’ve done to me
Watch as I grip this gun

I watch as you gape in surprise
I watch the tears well in your eyes
I watch as you scream
I don’t want to die!
I watch as I finger the trigger
“This will make everything better…”
Or so I think.
I squeeze my eyes shut and squeeze the trigger
Bang!
A hole.
Above your head

No
No
I’m not like you
Killing someone is something I won’t do
You killed me on the inside, it’s really the same thing
As killing me on the outside

Instant gratification isn’t worth a thing
If death by my hand brings

I drop the gun and turn
I know you have the burn
A scar on the inside no one can see
A physical scar is something I won’t do
I’d hate the crimson color that would flow from you
Why settle for that when I can leave you with
Emotional scars that will never quit

Color me bloody
Color me red
Blood is the wonder that I’ll always dread

Color me bloody
Color me red
Crimson is the color
I won’t color you with
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Author's Comments

Ah, the long awaited Color me bloody. It's alright, But I like Just because much better. It fits me well. This is like the complete oppsite of that poem. Well, I am rather proud of this one, but I don't like the ending very much. The wording is eh, but what are ya gonna do. So comments are very helpful for this one.

Hope you like, ~ANIMA-Bid

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:iconpaltzu:
It's totally great, I like it ^^

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:heart:Love forever, love is free:heart:
:iconanima-bid:
I liked it!

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The cheif export of Bidopolis is unicorns.
:iconanima-bid:
Crap. I hit post by accident before I finished.
I cant really describe what I liked about it....it was just... great? *lack of better word* I tihink it was amazing.

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The cheif export of Bidopolis is unicorns.
:iconkyotama:
:evillaugh: Ha! I knew you'd love it! Maybe... It's rather oppsite to my last one? Just because? :shrug: I dunno, I like Just because better, but I'm glad you liked. And thanks for the fave ;) :hug:

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Take Jean's powers away and she becomes a super model house wife... Ho shit she's the Marvel's answer to Angelina Jolie. ~pearlblade

Whoa. Coo Coo kachu got screwed.
:iconkyotama:
Thanks much :D :bow:

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Take Jean's powers away and she becomes a super model house wife... Ho shit she's the Marvel's answer to Angelina Jolie. ~pearlblade

Whoa. Coo Coo kachu got screwed.
:iconpaltzu:
No problem :D

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:heart:Love forever, love is free:heart:
:iconanima-bid:
No prob =P

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The cheif export of Bidopolis is unicorns.
:iconmusicxxjunkie:
I like it, it told a story. :) As always with rhyming poems, the flow is going to be harder to sustain due to trying to fit in the rhyme word at the end of the line. What I always find useful is counting out the syllables for each line and making sure it's the same amount of syllables as the line that it's paired with (for rhyming). Sure it takes a lot of time, but I've done that with a few of my poems, and it's very successful.

I like the concept anyway, nice work.

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{ and the rivers of blood pushed back in my veins. }
:iconkyotama:
Thank you that's what i was aiming for. Rhyming is kinda hard for me, I dunno why though ^^; I'm not that good at it, not like Mike can. *sighs*
I'll try that out the next time and see how it works, thanks for the tip :D

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Take Jean's powers away and she becomes a super model house wife... Ho shit she's the Marvel's answer to Angelina Jolie. ~pearlblade

Whoa. Coo Coo kachu got screwed.

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